Rewriting a blog intro that reads as AI

Updated 2026-09-20 · a working page, not a sales page

The most common AI intro pattern is a warm-up paragraph that sets context nobody needed, followed by a sentence that finally says the point. The reader left before that sentence.

Short answer

Delete the first paragraph and see if the post improves. It usually does.
Open with the specific problem, not the category of the problem.
No 'In today's fast-paced world', no dictionary definition, no apology for writing.
Put a number or a name in the first two sentences.
Tell the reader what they will be able to do at the end, but once, in one clause.

Four openings that hold a reader

the concrete failure: 'Our first launch got four upvotes and two of them were mine.'

the number: 'Two hundred drafts, and the same three problems every time.'

the contradiction: 'Everyone tells you to write shorter emails. Our best-performing one was 300 words.'

the direct claim, stated without hedging: 'Detectors do not work and nobody should build a business on them.'

All four put information in the first sentence. That is the entire difference.

Why models produce warm-ups

Generated text optimises for not being wrong, so it establishes context before committing. That behaviour is correct for a report and fatal for an intro. Human bloggers skip it because they assume the reader already clicked for a reason.

If you must keep context, move it after the first concrete point, where it becomes an explanation instead of a delay.

The cut pass, in three steps

1. Mark the first sentence that contains a fact.

2. Delete everything before it.

3. Read the new first line as if it were the headline. If it does not narrow the topic, the real opening is one sentence later.

Before / after

What people usually write	What it looks like after
In today's fast-paced digital landscape, content creation has become more important than ever for businesses of all sizes.	Our first launch got four upvotes. Two were mine and one was my co-founder's.
Artificial intelligence has revolutionised the way we work, and writing is no exception.	I ran the same 40-word paragraph through six rewriting tools. Two of them changed the meaning.
Many people struggle with writing effectively, and this article will explore some strategies.	The hardest sentence to write is the one that names what you actually want. Here is how I find it.

What this page will not do. It will not make a post useful if the body has nothing in it, and it cannot guarantee search traffic. The intro only decides whether the body gets read.

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Questions

How long should an intro be?

Two to four sentences. If you are four paragraphs in and have not made a claim, cut.

Should I include a table of contents?

Only for long reference posts. For an argument, it delays the point.

Is a question a good opening?

Rarely. A question asks the reader to do work before you have given them a reason to.